Swirl Antara

In the first line of the third stanza: why did you cut out the syllable in 'ev'ry'? You don't need to cut a syllable, so 'every' would work just as ...

First off, it's a poem don't go into the psychology of it because THAT'S NOT THE POINT second, you totally contradicted yourself by first saying that everyone is normal and ...

any ideas for what?

sure!umm... so the main character is the guy right? and he's a vampire-ish character (I'm assuming this because of the bloody fangs)And he's being chased by an enemy. I think ...

What exactly do you want us to review?this is just facts, so there's few writing errors we could comment on, no parts of the plot that don't make sense.

thanks for your comments! By the way, it's about weres, but I like to leave it open at the beginning, another reason why it's short. Do you really think that ...

wow....that is really long....you might want to break it into two parts or else reciewers wont want to review it all, or the review will be REALLY me if you ...

space this out and i'll read it plus....you might want to rate it, 'cause from what I sounds pretty dark-ish

Umm....you should probably space this out quite a bit. One huge block is hard on the eyes and many people refrain from reviewing. PM me when you've spaced it a ...

this is.....excellent. Short, to the point and obviously well thought-out PM me when you write more please!!!

this is interesting and appealing to see.....but I have absolutley no clue what it's about. And why is it upside down?

What is rain? But tears of the sky. I would rephrase it as one sentence. -> What is rain, But tears of the sky good job gigi!!

no more replies please, I get the point. I never have been much of a poet

good job, I really enjoyed it. I used to fence, so I knew what foil etc. meant, but an unknowing reader might be confused by some of your terminology. I ...